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** Ma **** n Hunt... **   Fundraiser Letter After!!!!!!!!!!!! Dear Mrs. Benton, When was the last time you had fun, made a difference, and made a sick child smile all by saying one word…yes? We should have a fundraiser here at Jamison Elementary. I think this because it will be great for the comity, we will be helping sick children who have cancer, and lots of people will be very happy. Also I was thinking maybe we could donate all of the money that we get from the fundraiser to Doylestown Hospital for kids who have cancer. We should have a fundraiser here at Jamison Elementary school to raise money for kids who have cancer. I think that we should do this event because hundreds of kids die every day from cancer and they haven’t found a cure yet and maybe if we give them enough money by the fundraiser they can try to make medicine to cure the sickness, and I already have a couple ideas I can make 100 bracelets, 75 key chains, 75 necklaces, and 50 book marks. I can also set up a food court, I can also set up an arts and crafts area, relay races, musical chairs, and I can make up a fun little tag game, but now your probley wondering where, when, and why are you asking me? Well if you say yes to this amazing offer we could have it in the front of the school because that will hopefully get people’s attention when they drive by the school. But now you are most likely wondering why are you asking me? Well I’m asking you because I need your permission to have anything on school property and also I may need a little help getting the word out and some tables and chairs for the supplies but you don’t have to buy anything we can use the tables from the cafeteria and if you are worrying about them getting dirty, I promise I will clean up when the event is over, and if you say yes to this opportunity it would probley take me about a week to get businesses to agree to sell some of their items. Also I Know what you are probley thinking, that I am only in the 5th grade and I am not even responsible to have a phone let alone run a fundraiser but I really am responsible ask Mrs. Levy about the fuzzy sock club with Ally Clark, Victoria Howse, Maddie Maurie, and Lauren Lassin.
 * “Spit, spit, spit and you are not it LAUREN’S IT” everyone scattered I was alone with my only companion was the dark scary night sky. Suddenly I here a stick crack my eyes winded I couldn’t tell who it was. I tiptoed closer, and closer and I herd it again I reached out my shaking nervous arm out toughed on the top of there arm and screamed YOU’RE IT.I ran as fast as I could leaped into a trash can closed the smelly lid. My heart was pounding in fear and, I herd the footsteps pass me I was relived. I took a deep dreadful breath. Disgusting I whispered to myself when I realized that my hand was in a pile of coffee crumbs I shook it off and pulled away. I herd the footsteps pass me for the 2nd time I held my breath and started to think how I was going to get out of here. Suddenly I here some one opening and closing all of the trash cans in front of me. Imedently I started thoghing everything in sight on top of me. I curled up into a ball just in the nick of time as the person opened my lid my heart dropped and shattered in to my stomach. The person closed my lid and opened the one sitting next to me I was relieved. That’s it the mysterious person cried “that’s it I’m the loser of the year” everyone peered out of the obvious but yet creative hiding spots to see if she was faking she said “I’m serious” and everyone stepped out fast and raced for the traditional cake! **

We should have a fundraiser here at Jamison Elementary school. And this is all I need from you: if you could please give me permission to use school property, if I can use some of the cafeteria tables and chairs, and get the word out to everyone. And by doing this fundraiser will help the school out too! By more kids being enthusiastic about learning, because they had this fun little event and their brains had a break. Also I can make posters and put them up in the hallways and I will send out flyers to everyone in my neighborhood I will also tell my basketball team, and my family and friends, but before I do any of this I need your permission. And I will be helping around at each station and helping my friends who said that they will be doing this event with me. You Probley Know them here are their names Kathryn Davis and Mackenzie Edwards who will be running the bracelet station:10 cents a sting or bead, Emily Marshall who will be running the tag station $3.00 a round, Izzy Manzella and Sofia Sonnet who will be running the Arts And Crafts Station:$1.00 a paper, Ally Clark, Victoria Howse, and Kaitlyn Hammond will be running The food court: prices very, Maddie Maurie and Jenna Markman who will be running the talent show station:$5.00 a act, Stefanie Glatts who will be running the Musical Chairs $3.00 a game, and Reilly Doyle and Kylie Kenny who will be running the Relay Race station: $3.00 a race. Also by doing this event we are not only having fun but we are also helping the world by keeping people alive because all of the money that we get out of the fundraiser we will give to Doylestown hospital to find a cure for cancer!

We should have a fundraiser here at Jamison Elementary school. I think this because it will make a difference in not only In Jamison, it will make a difference in the world. And believe me I will give 110% into this and not slack off and put this responsibility all on you I will try my very hardest to make this fundraiser fun and effective not only to Jamison but to the world. From, Lauren Lassin

See the difference??? IN the beginning of the year i used a bigger fon't with less words in the end of they year i used smaller fon't and more words! I really did improve this year ALOT!

These are my writing grades this year Iam proud of my first two but i think i could have done better and took mytime on the third one.